María Monday 20/04/2020 19.15-20.15

Hi! Today, we are going to continue working on correcting the texts, before doing it please check the videos of previous Monday. We are applying the theory on those videos into these practical writings. Apart from correcting the mistakes I would like your impression, telling me what would you improve, vocabulary, grammar, cohesion if they answer the questions, if something is missing, do they provide supporting arguments, topic sentences? … all you can think about. (Both of them are score 5)

PSDT: I am aware that you have a lot of homework/housework so you can choose to do both or if you don’t have enough time just do one of them.

EXAMPLE 1 (Si no he contado mal son 24 errores de gramática, vocabulario…)

There is no longer enough natural resources to sustain current levels of economic growth. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Recently, the demands of natural resources have risen dramatically across the world due to population growth. Some people state that we have not enough resources. However, there are some individuals who disagree with this opinion. In this essay, the issues behind this phenomenon will be examined.

On the one hand, some people state that if the number of natural resource will continue to degrease we cannot have a comfortable life because natural resources are limited. According to a government research in the USA shows that if this situation will continue, the petrol will lose in 2050. Moreover, it is widely said that the number of population in the world will increase. This will make the amount of natural resource decrease.

On the other hand, there are some individuals who disagree with above-mentioned perception. The demands of natural resources will be lessen owning to improving the technology. For example, the developments of technology such as electronic cars gave a positive impact in the society. By using this, we can decline the consumption of natural resources. Eventually, we will not need natural fuel. In my opinion, decreasing of natural resource is quite crisis, I think the loss of it give a negative impact in the society because even we won’t have a comfortable life any more.

In conclusion, I agree with the idea that there is no longer enough natural resources to sustain this situation. In order to defense our life, the governments every countries should tackle this issue.

EXAMPLE 2 (16 errors)

Some people think that they can learn better by themselves than with a teacher. Others think that it is always better to have a teacher. Which do you prefer? Use specific reasons to develop your essay.

It is certainly said that learning is an ongoing process .Every person learn something new according to their age, experience, knowledge and education. According to my point of view it is always better to have _teacher or guide for study.

One teacher has adequate knowledge to teach their student. He knows all the possible ways to make subject easier for the students, moreover, he teaches them in an effective manner. For example, some students are weak in some subjects but a teacher always guides them according to their mental capacity. He teaches them as fun. Some people can learn better in group by discuss the topics with others. In class people can know the views of others, even they know how we can learn effectively. Where the teacher always gives an easy direction to learn.

In the today’s competitive world, everybody is busy, some people think that rather to waste their time to go for classes they can learn better their subject _. They can attend online classes by using the Internet at home. They can get relevant information from the Internet regarding their topic. There is not specific time or age limit to learn something new. Some new things we can only learn from experience – for example new facts, new habits and so on.

In sum up, I would like to say that it is always better for the people to have a teacher because a teacher has good knowledge, experience and is educated how to teach others. People will learn from a teacher in an easier way rather than on their own.